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Hi Vignesh! I've watched your short film and I believe it's one of the better ones I've seen from first-time directors. With that being said, it is not without its flaws.

From a cinematography standpoint, it looked well-polished and well-framed. However, I felt that there was a lack of motivation for the camera movements. I do understand how hard it is to shoot dialogue scenes in interesting ways, but the constant unmotivated camera movements kinda took me out of the story. Moreover, I felt that B&W wasn't necessary for this film although I understand it was inspired by 40s screwball comedies.

From an acting standpoint, the performances were pretty good. However, there are certain moments here and there which felt amateur and forced.

Moving on to the story, which is where I encountered some problems. Even though it's supposed to be a comedy, this short just didn't have enough tension or conflict to sustain its runtime. There wasn't anything urgent for the characters to do or the audience to watch. It just felt slightly devoid of structure. I feel that the beginning could've been cut to the main character talking about conning his ex-partner and we could've explored more of that, setting up the conflict that would follow later.

Which brings me to dialogue, which is not that bad given the entire short is based on it. However, due to the lack of conflict and subtext, it can feel stale after a while, and scenes with characters start to feel like "Hey, listen to me, I have something to say!" I just wished it could've been slightly snappier and more interesting, maybe have characters argue with each other.

In conclusion, this short was pretty entertaining albeit flawed as every first time short film is. If you plan to turn this into a feature, I suggest you take into consideration, the things I've mentioned above. However, I have to say that I am no expert and if you have opposing thoughts, that's fine. You don't have to agree with everything I say, take what's useful, leave what isn't. Overall, this short is a good first attempt and I wish to see more from you in the future. Good luck! 🙂

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